Monday, 5 January 2015
INK SCRIPT 1
INK – Script 1
SCENE 2
Scene 1
INT. DENTENTION ROOM. DAY
MR CROSS is in the detention room supervising ED, who is in detention. MR CROSS is tapping his pen whilst ED is writing his detention lines. ED’S pen run out of ink. ED looks in his bag full of pens but instead he ask MR CROSS for a pen.
ED
(Puts hand up and asks with no emotion)
Can I borrow a pen sir?
MR CROSS picks up a pen and is hesitant to give ED the pen. MR CROSS’ phone starts to ring. MR CROSS steps out of the room whilst answering his phone. ED notices MR CROSS leaving the room. With MR CROSS’ pencil case in sight, ED gets up to go towards it. ED confidently takes one pen. Consumed by greed he continuously steals pens until he hears MR CROSS footsteps coming back into the room. ED looks back at his chair and then back at the pencil case. ED doesn’t know whether take another pen or go back to his seat. MR CROSS captures ED in the act and discovers his school bag full of pens.
MR CROSS
(Aggressively whilst grabbing ED’S arm)
Come with me now… To the head’s office !
INT.HALLWAY.DAY
ED and MR CROSS walk towards to the heads masters office in silence. ED is nervous and starts to worry about the consequences. As they arrive next to the head teacher’s office, ED notices MR CROSS closing the half open head teacher’s door. ED is astonished, without saying a word ED and MR CROSS continue to walk silently. Not knowing where MR CROSS is taking him ED begins to get scared. MR CROSS turns into a corridor which ED has never seen before.
MR CROSS
(Points to the corridor)
Panicking ED follows Mr cross. They stop at door.
MR CROSS
(Turns around and looks ED in the eye)
So… You like pens ay?
ED
(Nervously and quietly)
Yes.
MR CROSS
(Looks around and then quietly open the doors
The room is dark and consist of a large map on the wall which were labelled, a desk and a chair which had a black table lamp sitting on it. In the corner of the room ED notices pencil cases with names labelled on it assorted in alphabetical order. MR CROSS explains to ED that he admires ED’S stationary stealing skills. MR CROSS gives ED the opportunity to steal more pens but, ED has to give it back to MR CROSS.
SCENE 3
INT.INSIDE THE CLOAK ROOM. DAY
MR CROSS
(Sitting down behind his desk and say’s sternly)
You are guilty of committing a felony.
Now you are considered as a young offender
Within the school. Well done, are you happy?!
MR CROSS makes a deal with ED to steal pens and return it back to him. ED and MR CROSS set up an incredible pen stealing network over the next few weeks. ED is consumed by greed and starts to steal pens for himself. Ed steals RED pens from the head teachers office the most hardest and desired pen. MRCROSS betrays ED and takes the red pens for himself. ED is set up by MR CROSS and is caught by the head teacher who hands him over to the pen police. MR CROSS is seen placing a pencil with ED’S name on it next to the other pencil cases. MR CROSS leaves the room to stand next to the head masters office. Whilst standing outside the heads office a young boy is walking past him.
MR CROSS
(SMILING)
So… you like pens ay ?
MR CROSS insist that the boy follows him to the secret cloak room.
INK SCRIPT 2
INK – Script 2
SCENE 2
Scene 1
INT. DENTENTION ROOM. DAY
MR CROSS is in the detention room supervising ED, who is in detention. MR CROSS is tapping his pen whilst he is waiting for the clock to strike 3. ED looks in his bag full of pens but instead he ask MR CROSS for a pen to start writing his lines
ED
(Puts hand up and asks with no emotion)
Can I borrow a pen sir?
MR CROSS picks up a pen from his bi bag of pens and is hesitant to give ED the pen, he gives ED the worst pen. MR CROSS also give ED a dirty look. MR CROSS’ phone starts to ring. MR CROSS steps out of the room whilst answering his phone. ED notices MR CROSS leaving the room. With MR CROSS’ big bag full of pens in sight, ED gets up with his bag and goes to MR CROSS’ desk. ED confidently takes one pen and places it in his bag. Consumed by greed he begins to open MR CROSS’ draws and takes even more pens. Whilst ED’S back is facing the door, MR CROSS silently walks in and stands by the door with his hands crossed.
MR CROSS
(Coughs & walks closer to ED)
ED turns around with his bag in his hands and sees MR CROSS
MR CROSS
(Aggressively whilst grabbing ED’S arm)
Come with me now… To the heads office!
INT.HALLWAY/ SECRET CLOAKROOM .DAY
ED and MR CROSS walk towards to the heads masters office in silence. ED is nervous and starts to worry about the consequences as his conscience starts to take over his thoughts.
CONSCIENCE
You have done it again ED.
What will your mum say this time?
You’ll be grounded for life.
As they arrive next to the head teacher’s office, ED notices MR CROSS closing the half open head teacher’s door. ED is astonished, without saying a word ED and MR CROSS continue to walk silently. Not knowing where MR CROSS is taking him ED begins to get scared. MR CROSS turns into a corridor which ED has never seen before.
MR CROSS
(Points to the corridor)
Panicking ED follows Mr cross. They stop at a door.
MR CROSS
(Looks around and then quietly open the doors
The room is dark and consist of a large map of students and pens on the wall which was labelled, a chair and a desk which has a black table lamp sitting on it. In the corner of the room ED notices pencil cases with names labelled on it assorted in alphabetical order. MR CROSS explains to ED that he admires ED’S stationary stealing skills. MR CROSS gives ED the opportunity to steal more pens but, ED has to give it back to MR CROSS.
MR CROSS
(Turns around and looks ED in the eye)
So… You like pens ay?
ED
(Gulps)
ED
(Nervously and quietly)
Yes.
SCENE 3
INT.INSIDE THE CLOAK ROOM. DAY
MR CROSS
(Sitting down behind his desk and say’s sternly)
You are guilty of committing a felony.
Now you are considered as a young offender
Within the school. Well done, are you happy?!
ED
(GULPS)
MR CROSS
However, I am willing to make a deal with you… I want you to give me back what’s mine.
Pens!
Every years we have pupils come and go and pens come and go.
Now it’s time to get my pens. The Red pens!
ED and MR CROSS set up an incredible pen stealing network over the next few weeks. ED is consumed by greed and starts to steal pens for himself. Ed steals RED pens from the head teachers office the most hardest and desired pen.
MRCROSS betrays ED and takes the red pens for himself. ED is set up by MR CROSS and is caught by the head teacher who hands him over to the pen police.
PEN POLICE
Hello, hello, hello.
Who ‘ave we got here ay ?
MR CROSS is seen placing a pencil case with ED’S name on it next to the other pencil cases.
MR CROSS leaves the room to stand next to the head masters office. Whilst standing outside the heads office a young boy is walking past him.
MR CROSS
(SMILING)
So… you like pens ay ?
MR CROSS insist that the boy follows him to the secret cloak room.
INK SCRIPT 3
INK - Script 3
· Changed Ed’s normal size bag to a huge bag in order to emphasise his love for pens and how many he steals
· Made Ed’s bag colour coordinated to show his obsession is similar to that of Mr Cross’
· Also gave Mr Cross a huge bag to show the two have something in common to show Mr Cross has an obsession
· Added Mr Cross feeling hesitant to show he has a problem with giving pens out despite his hundreds in his bag and desk drawers
· Also made Mr Cross give Ed an ugly broken pen even though he had many more normal ones to show he hates sharing with his students, especially his knew stuff
· Made Ed take his bag to the desk to show he doesn’t like leaving his pens behind, and he has big plans to steal Mr Cross’ pens, also to show he is a professional
· Added Ed being caught from behind with his bag of pens
· Added a voice over of Ed being worried about getting in trouble, so audience are as surprised as Ed when the plans change, show typical thoughts when a child is sent to the head teachers office
· Added a fade to black when entering the room to show suspense of what’s inside the room
· Changed the dialogue to police jargon to make the matter seem more serious even though it’s about pens
· Add more dialect to explain the story and make sure the audience are fully aware of what’s going on
· Add more scenes to make the story more interesting and add more layers to it, also to add to logical causality and add depth to the characters
Scene 1
INT. DENTENTION ROOM. DAY
MR CROSS is in the detention room supervising ED, who is in detention. MR CROSS is tapping his pen whilst he is waiting for the clock to strike 3. ED looks in his big bag which has three carrier bags inside of it all consisting of pens which are colour coordinated, but instead of using one of them he asks MR CROSS for a pen to start writing his lines
ED
(Puts hand up and asks with no emotion)
Can I borrow a pen sir?
MR CROSS picks up a pen from his big bag of pens and is hesitant to give ED the pen, he gives ED the worst pen. MR CROSS also give ED a dirty look. MR CROSS’ phone starts to ring. MR CROSS steps out of the room whilst answering his phone. ED notices MR CROSS leaving the room. With MR CROSS’ big bag full of pens in sight, ED gets up with his bag of colour coordinated pens and goes to MR CROSS’ desk. ED confidently takes one pen and places it in his bag. Consumed by greed he begins to open MR CROSS’ draws and takes even more pens. Whilst ED’S back is facing the door, MR CROSS silently walks in and stands by the door with his hands crossed.
MR CROSS
(Coughs& amp; walks closer to ED)
ED turns around with his bag in his hands and sees MR CROSS
MR CROSS
(Aggressively whilst grabbing ED’s arm)
Come with me now… To the heads office!
SCENE 2
INT.HALLWAY/ SECRET CLOAKROOM .DAY
ED and MR CROSS walk towards to the heads masters office in silence. ED is nervous and starts to worry about the consequences as his conscience starts to take over his thoughts.
CONSCIENCE
You have done it again ED.
What will your mum say this time?
You’ll be grounded for life.
As they arrive next to the head teacher’s office, ED notices MR CROSS closing the half open head teacher’s door. ED is astonished, without saying a word ED and MR CROSS continue to walk silently. Not knowing where MR CROSS is taking him ED begins to get scared. MR CROSS turns into a corridor which ED has never seen before.
MR CROSS
(Points to the corridor)
Panicking ED follows Mr cross. They stop at a door.
MR CROSS
(Looks around and then quietly open the door) Screen goes pitch black
INT.INSIDE THE CLOAK ROOM. DAY
When the lights come on we see that the room consists of a large crime board of students and pens on the wall which is labelled, a chair and a desk which has a black table lamp sitting on it MR CROSS is standing behind the table and ED is sitting in front of him. In the corner of the room ED notices pencil cases with names labelled on it assorted in alphabetical order.
MR CROSS
(Turns around and looks ED in the eye)
So… You like pens ay?
ED
(Gulps)
ED
(Nervously and quietly)
Yes.
MR CROSS
(Sitting down behind his desk MR CROSS demeanour changes into ‘cockney bloke’ )
(MR CROSS takes a breath)
MR CROSS
I’ve got a proposition for you Ed… I want you to get me back what’s mine.
Get me back my pens. Every year students ask me for pens and never return them.
Now it’s my turn… to get back my pens, and I think you’re the man for the job.
You know what I mean?
ED
(Smirks and nods)
SCENE 4
Over the next few days ED and MR CROSS set up an incredible pen stealing network. A montage is shown of ED stealing pens and the big bag of pens getting filled more and more each day. ED is consumed by greed and starts to steal pens for himself. One day MR CROSS offers ED another proposition.
MR CROSS
Ed, I’ve got a new mission for you. After seeing how skilful you are, I can see it’s in your blood, you do some of the finest work I’ve ever seen. And so… I invite you, to join me… on the ultimate pen heist.
(ED’s eyes widen as the sound of this task sounds exciting)
MR CROSS
Ah! I knew you would be up to it, now. We have lots of work to do. Firstly, the object you are to retrieve safely is placed here
(MR CROSS gets out a map of the school and points to the head teachers office)
MR CROSS
You will walk in around 10:35 and 10:40, no earlier and no later, he will be getting his morning coffee from the staff room. You sneak in, take 3 steps forward, turn 90 degrees and take 2 more steps, carefully. DO NOT TOUCH ANYTHING! To your right you will see a brand new box of Bic’s finest red pens, placed next to the bowl of apples on his desk. Grab them, and bring them to this room as quickly as you can, don’t forget to shut the door behind you.
SCENE 5
MR CROSS is waiting in the staff room looking at his watch, at 10:35 the head teacher enters and grabs his coffee to go. MR CROSS quickly walks up to the head teacher
MR CROSS
Hey John. Hey what was that kid doing in your room? You know, Ed?
JOHN
Ed? Now? In my room!?
MR CROSS
Yeah I saw him go in there a few minutes ago, I assumed you were in there otherwise I’d have stopped him, you might want to go and check that out!
MR CROSS does an either hand gesture and a crooked smile. Quickly HEAD TEACHER makes his way to his class room, ED has just discovered the box and is about to pick it up, next to them he see’s another box of unopened brand new pens, looks at the time and see’s he still has one more minute, ED picks them up too. When behind him, we see the head teacher standing there just like MR CROSS did previously.
HEAD TEACHER
(Coughs)
ED
(freezes)
(whispers)
Damn
Behind the HEAD TEACHER, MR CROSS appears
MR CROSS
Just called the pen police sir, they’re on their way. Should have known a new box of pens like that would have people sniffing around
HEAD TEACHER confused
Thank you MR CROSS
(MR CROSS nods
PEN POLICE arrive shortly and rush into the office
PEN POLICE
Well, well, well. A young offender ay?
Edward Bic you are being arrested on suspicion of theft, you do not have to say anything but anything you do say may be given in evidence of which you later rely on in court.
As everyone vacates the room, MR CROSS while laughing to himself and shaking his head, walks into the room and grabs both boxes of pens on the desk, he spins around and dances out of the office.
SCENE 6
Back in his secret room, MR CROSS is looking in a mirror talking to himself
MR CROSS (to himself mimicking the police)
Well, well, well, MR CROSS you’ve only gone and done it again haha!
MR CROSS goes over to his row of pencil cases and adds another to his collection, after the letter D and strokes it, he looks at a register next to the pencil cases, and see’s the name Frank. We hear a knock on his door.
MR CROSS (shouts)
COME IN
BOY (FRANK)
You wanted to see me Sir?
MR CROSS
Yes…
MR CROSS goes over to the boy
MR CROSS
So… You like pens aye?
Mr Cross QnA
Mr Cross - Q&A
What would your super power be?
To be able to become invisible, I could do a lot of things then.
What is your greatest fear?
When students ask for pens... I fear that they'll never be returned
What is the worst thing anyone's said to you?
I hate being asked for pens. I absolutely hate it. What is the worst job you've done?
Becoming a teacher, I extremely regret it.
What is the closest you've come to death?
When my pens run out of ink. scary.
Which living person do you most admire, and why?
Myself, because I am superior compared to anyone else.
I can wrap people around my fingers like a piece of thread.
What was the best kiss of your life?
I don't kiss and tell.
If you could go back in time, where would you go?
I would go to the moon, I will control it and make life living hell for you. Magazine Review Research
Above is an example of a film review from the independent magazine 'Time Out'. Here you see a short review, straight to the point with all the information you need; director, author, actors names and rating. At the top you see the title of the film in bold & the year it was released, this is to make sure people see it when flicking through the magazine, as the article is short and some may skip it by accident. The reason for the article being short instead of a double page spread is to ensure the reader doesn't get bored, as most would prefer to read a small amount of text than a huge spread all talking about the same stuff. This is likely to result in more people actually reading the review instead of skipping it, leading to more coverage for the film and director. As well as this, people may be more likely to buy the magazine again. After the name of the film, the directors name is present to allow the audience to look further into their work if they liked the film, also in case the audience didn't know that specific person directed the film, say if they are a fan and so the film may get more views.
Story Analysis 1
Story Analysis 1
After discussing our story ideas in our groups we then talked about the issues with each story taking into account issues that might affect the making of the film, the four main categories that we judged each idea on were practicalities, logical causality, thematic unity and character development.
We first focused on the practicalities of each idea, these are the issues that might affect the making of the idea into a film.
The first of the story ideas that we looked at was JoJors, in terms of practicalities we decided that the location would be an issue, the difficulties being that the story relies on the main character visiting his parents in the country. This would have meant having to find a suitable location for the story such as a village. Shooting in a location like this would also be difficult as we would have to take into account gaining permission to shoot in our desired locations with the cameras and also perhaps having to have an adult accompanying us.
When looking at my idea we noticed an issue with casting, it is essential to the plot that the main character, Aiden, is able to put contact lenses on. Therefore it is important that we cast an actor who can apply contacts to his eyes. This can be a major issue with the limited casting options that we have. Also, similar to Jojor's idea, there is also an issue of having to acquire permission to shoot in certain locations.
We then looked at Deni's idea to discuss practicalities and we a few issues, the first issue is finding a red blob to use as a prop, this can be difficult as it is not a typical item and would have to be either especially made or even removed from the story. Another problem is the use of dogs in the story, this could be a problem for us as it is hard to shoot consistent shots and could prolong the shooting process, we may also have to train the dogs which would be even more time consuming.
Logical causality is the idea that everything that happens occurs in a logical manner and is not unexplained and without a clear motive. When looking at logical causality we agreed that a scene in JoJors wasn't explained and did not make sense, in this scene a car goes past the main protagonists car and is described to be wearing dark clothing with a sinister demeanor upon discussion we concluded that this scene was not clear as it does not explain in the short where the car is going and the reasoning behind the characters presence in conjunction with the story.
For my idea, we determined that the only lack of logical causality is the fact that the main character randomly finds out about the article on the contact lenses, we felt that this important plot point should be explained in more detail and in a logical way, one idea we came up with in order to rectify this was to change the story so that the main character is in university as a student and comes across the research on the contact lenses when visiting the campus laboratories.
Similarly in Deni's idea we saw the same problem, in this story the red plot plays a pivotal part of the story but is not explained and does not make logical sense as well, however this idea of a red blob makes the story more quirky and weird.
Thematic unity is the idea that the activities that happen in the short all center around one theme.
For JoJor's idea we discussed the different themes that can be associated with the short and decided that there are many different underlying themes such as loss, emotion and darkness, however, there is no one clear and direct theme for the idea. This can be a problem as it can confuse the audience if there is no clear direction of the film, this can also be troubling for the makers of the film, because the theme is not straightforward it can make it harder to create an effective and quality film without a clear direction, this could mean that the emotions conveyed with the theme are not captured on film.
For both my idea and Deni's story idea we all agreed that they both had one clear theme of greed with many different underlying themes that are associated with red such as passion, anger and willpower, we felt that this would be the most effective as with a clear theme it is easy to create a short around those ideas as well as adding other themes into the story as well increasing its depth.
Character development is important in that it allows the audience to emotionally connect with the story and characters, character development can be the driving force in a story and without it it can leave the viewer feeling unsatisfied with the ending.
One of the main issues with JoJors idea is the lack of a clear change in the main character, we do not clearly see his development from the beginning of the story to the end and so it can make it difficult for the viewer to enjoy the film as much. The main character also lacks a distinctive motive at the end of the story reducing the effectiveness of the character to connect with the audience.
In contrast, in both my idea and Deni's idea there was excellent character development, both main characters change due to greed and at the end of the short there is a clear difference between the characters at the beginning and the end, we felt that Deni's idea had the best character development as we also see the changes in other important characters such as the old man and best friend.
This story analysis task has helped us to identify all the issues in each story idea and improves our hindsight to similar issues when creating other story ideas, it also allows us to understand what we need to do in order to perfect our story ideas.
We first focused on the practicalities of each idea, these are the issues that might affect the making of the idea into a film.
The first of the story ideas that we looked at was JoJors, in terms of practicalities we decided that the location would be an issue, the difficulties being that the story relies on the main character visiting his parents in the country. This would have meant having to find a suitable location for the story such as a village. Shooting in a location like this would also be difficult as we would have to take into account gaining permission to shoot in our desired locations with the cameras and also perhaps having to have an adult accompanying us.
When looking at my idea we noticed an issue with casting, it is essential to the plot that the main character, Aiden, is able to put contact lenses on. Therefore it is important that we cast an actor who can apply contacts to his eyes. This can be a major issue with the limited casting options that we have. Also, similar to Jojor's idea, there is also an issue of having to acquire permission to shoot in certain locations.
We then looked at Deni's idea to discuss practicalities and we a few issues, the first issue is finding a red blob to use as a prop, this can be difficult as it is not a typical item and would have to be either especially made or even removed from the story. Another problem is the use of dogs in the story, this could be a problem for us as it is hard to shoot consistent shots and could prolong the shooting process, we may also have to train the dogs which would be even more time consuming.
Logical causality is the idea that everything that happens occurs in a logical manner and is not unexplained and without a clear motive. When looking at logical causality we agreed that a scene in JoJors wasn't explained and did not make sense, in this scene a car goes past the main protagonists car and is described to be wearing dark clothing with a sinister demeanor upon discussion we concluded that this scene was not clear as it does not explain in the short where the car is going and the reasoning behind the characters presence in conjunction with the story.For my idea, we determined that the only lack of logical causality is the fact that the main character randomly finds out about the article on the contact lenses, we felt that this important plot point should be explained in more detail and in a logical way, one idea we came up with in order to rectify this was to change the story so that the main character is in university as a student and comes across the research on the contact lenses when visiting the campus laboratories.
Similarly in Deni's idea we saw the same problem, in this story the red plot plays a pivotal part of the story but is not explained and does not make logical sense as well, however this idea of a red blob makes the story more quirky and weird.
Thematic unity is the idea that the activities that happen in the short all center around one theme. For JoJor's idea we discussed the different themes that can be associated with the short and decided that there are many different underlying themes such as loss, emotion and darkness, however, there is no one clear and direct theme for the idea. This can be a problem as it can confuse the audience if there is no clear direction of the film, this can also be troubling for the makers of the film, because the theme is not straightforward it can make it harder to create an effective and quality film without a clear direction, this could mean that the emotions conveyed with the theme are not captured on film.
For both my idea and Deni's story idea we all agreed that they both had one clear theme of greed with many different underlying themes that are associated with red such as passion, anger and willpower, we felt that this would be the most effective as with a clear theme it is easy to create a short around those ideas as well as adding other themes into the story as well increasing its depth.
One of the main issues with JoJors idea is the lack of a clear change in the main character, we do not clearly see his development from the beginning of the story to the end and so it can make it difficult for the viewer to enjoy the film as much. The main character also lacks a distinctive motive at the end of the story reducing the effectiveness of the character to connect with the audience.
In contrast, in both my idea and Deni's idea there was excellent character development, both main characters change due to greed and at the end of the short there is a clear difference between the characters at the beginning and the end, we felt that Deni's idea had the best character development as we also see the changes in other important characters such as the old man and best friend.
This story analysis task has helped us to identify all the issues in each story idea and improves our hindsight to similar issues when creating other story ideas, it also allows us to understand what we need to do in order to perfect our story ideas.
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